Teen Poetry #4 |
dreams |
Hardkore Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 33San DIego, California |
Visions surround me Consisting of my fears and hopes Is it a glimpse into the future Or just an archie of the past Passion fuels my love Passion becomes consumed by love Without my love I become passionless |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
wow... nice it was very belivoquent i enjoyed this a lot, a lot of undeciveness bravo! -JDR |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Hardkore: Your format was very nice and to the point. We are all surrounded by those images. I think that regardless of whether or not the images are prophetic, we need to procede with life. That's the conclusion I've drawn in my poem In Silence we Talk. I know how this sort of thing feels. You've expressed it well. I hope that you are successful. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Really good one here. The thoughts are just wonderful. I liked this.....short but very deep. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautiful expression of thoughts and questions I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice job... it's tough to fit thoughts into such a small area, but you had a simple yet powerful message. Are you familiar with Senryu? Perhaps you should be, judging from this poem you might like it. Plus everyone else here is already sick of all mine... hehehe... maybe we just need someone else doing them too? I'll talk to you later. -Allan Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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