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Hunting An Abstract |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Hunting an Abstract: A jovial seduction with taunting expression. The chase is on my love, my prey. A tease with the objective of a catch. Moans of ecstasy cloud up all other thought. Focused with desire, passion, and utter drive. Fear me not, I mean you no harm. Subdue to my ways with a smile. There's no escape because I want you. You're in view and I make the move. What a catch, this invisible love!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Oh, SWEET ending that was your best yet and people are foolish to disagree wow wow wow nice job bud -JDR "I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking." |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! I like....Awseome job. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
no disagreements here!!.. it's amazing what you can do with words dopey.. outstanding work! "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
As usual...it's of up most peachy-ness.  I really liked this one...had a certain something...you know what I mean.  And thanks for asking (you asked me if I was ok) but I'm oke. No more insane than normal. lol I'll talk to ya later or something.I am no one if not myself. Angel of Darkness |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this poems so cool! great work |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice one. ~_^ Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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Stephanya Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 63Berkshire County~USA~ |
Gerat job! Keep it up...(:*stephani*:)A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent writing Javier! I really enjoyed your wording in this ... action packed ... you could envision a chase clearly, great imagery! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
o wow! ducky...j/k.. at first i had one idea to what this might have meant and after i read it a second time i realized it was something totally different. *big smile* ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "A jovial seduction with taunting expression. The chase is on my love, my prey. A tease with the objective of a catch. Moans of ecstasy cloud up all other thought. Focused with desire, passion, and utter drive." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ my favorite part. Regina sin from my lips? O tresspass sweetly urged!give me my sin again! W. Skakespeare |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i must be a bad hunter  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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MidnightMaverick Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35Duluth, MN, USA |
Smokin'. Love it. Awesome work. Definitely one of my favs. -Maverick |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Wow! Marvelous! I too, like acire, lack the stalking skills to bag my self such a species.  Exellent poem Dopes. I wanna say that a 100 times but I'll just do it once for now.  ~Jason To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many is research The early bird may get the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 02-03-2001).] |
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Silver Butterfly Junior Member
since 2001-03-13
Posts 42Between here and the end |
loved the poem. "moans of ecstacy" was a little bit over board on the imagry though. A+ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
(Applauds) Love it! It's going in my library, along with most of your poems, and I just thought I'd say that I think it deserves an A+ also. I'm in a bad mood. I didn't do very well at a writing competition I went to over the weekend. I'm dwelling on it too much. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ah Dopes this is most beautifully written. Your words are exactly like chocolate - You just can't get enough. It's so nice and so everything that it is heading into the library. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awesome poem. VERY beautifully written. I loved it... nice work. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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