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Dusk Flows to Dawn (By DreadedLiver & jeremydraul)
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Dusk Flows to Dawn (By DreadedLiver & jeremydraul) |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Well...i asked him if he wanted to do a poem together because I liked his style so much. This is what we came up with. This guy is very talented. Enjoy. "Dusk Flows to Dawn" The night is scary, and I’ve grown weary… As gremlins atop cathedrals do terrify. Shrieks of lighting, are more than frightening… And thunder blasts like shotguns in the sky. Please embrace me tight, until darkness fades to light, And the misty and foggy air, leads us upon a path unclear. Walking down alleys of dark, on a new feeling we embark… As I adore the moon shinning a glinting eye. Unknowing what this will bring, we still hear our hearts a’sing… And the caliginous night seems so likely to die. Please let us await, until the sunrise’s gate, Displays an elegant scene, to me and my queen. - J.D. Raulinaitis - J.A. Knightfellow < !signature--> "I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking." [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 01-30-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job on this one......uh.......guys. Yea I liked it. The style has its own ring. I liked it a lot, very original and creative.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
"Things that make you go hummmm......" LOL! You two did a good job on this. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
great work jeremy! great work dreadedliver!! this is a beautifully written combination of two great poets. outstanding job! "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Outstanding! And a coincidence... i just started a conjoined poem myself with a fellow member-- who that member is shall remain a mystery until posted. I love the poem! Very nicely done... i could see fragments of both of your styles scattered all over, which added a charming quality to it. Well done! -Allan Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
thanks a lot everyone... im glad "we" did a good job on this one... "zzzIzzzAMzzzDREADEDLIVERzzz" |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
yah, im happy to see people liked it thanks a lot! "zzzIzzzAMzzzJEREMYDRAULzzz" |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Really good guys!!! However your signatures confuse me....! It's very easy to do, so stop!!  hehehe nice job xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Yeah this is cool. This is great to see two of our most talented working together like this. I loved it. But uhhh yeah... your signitures confused me too. No inside jokes 'round here!!! what do are they about?~Jason< !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-31-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I am so onto you.... hehehe... ~_^ --the truth lies in the signatures!-- |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
your only on to me because I told you "zzzIzzzAMzzzDREADEDLIVERzzz" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
though I'm a hopeless romantic, allow me to say that this piece does make the heart smile I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I had my suspitions but I didn't wanna say anything. Something was smelly about you Dreadliver since the very beginning.... I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Are you the same person??? So wrong!!! huh!! xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 02-01-2001).] |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
 what is going on? Jeremy? Dreaded? please tell. I hate being in the dark. It's like theres a huge party and I wasn't invited. I will except a late invite, but just this once... ~Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
yes its true, dreadedliver is an alter-ego.... hes my dark side, muwahahaha!!! I will only reply through jeremydraul so dont think hes a snob -JDR "zzzIzzzAMzzzDREADEDLIVERzzz" |
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