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Greeneyes617
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since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

0 posted 2001-01-30 10:34 PM

The lies,
The hurt,
The disgust in my heart,
What was once there will never be.....

Open arms,
Looped ring,
Marriage,
Kisses,
Love,
Private moon,
Open window,
Never ending circle,
Space,
Truth.
Closed door

Hallie_Angel
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since 2000-12-06

Posts 102

1 posted 2001-01-30 11:01 PM

I'm sooo sorry for your loss. It must hurt a lot. It'll be okay though. Your family of poets it here!!! All of us.

Buh-Bye!!!

~Catherine

litle_krazy_poet
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since 2001-01-17

Posts 71

2 posted 2001-01-30 11:12 PM

short but meaningfull i see the sohwing of realationships, i loved it keep posting

somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-01-30 11:12 PM

Well like Hallie said......we "it" here for you. haha.

So yea........This poem was composed odd and I like that. A bit of change in your styles. Very good yet sad. I hope all gets better soon and you come to terms with your loss and move on. It'll take a while but you know that whole deal.....I'm not gonna give advice cuz I suck at it, but you know where I'm trying to get at.....Great poem.....get well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

4 posted 2001-01-30 11:21 PM

i agree with everyon else
nice styles
both were breviloquent poems
keep'em coming

-JDR

"I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking."

Greeneyes617
Member

since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

5 posted 2001-01-30 11:36 PM

~* Hallie_Angel, litle_krazy_poet, Dope_dope & jeremydraul*~ Thank you so much. You guys are the best.

anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

6 posted 2001-01-31 12:38 PM

i'm a little out of it
for not knowing your other style..
but this style is great!!
i loved each one of the short
poems..
so much emotion piled into
such short poems really makes
them that much more amazing.
great job!

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"

Greeneyes617
Member

since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

7 posted 2001-01-31 12:41 PM

Thank you anomaly187.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-01-31 05:15 PM

these 2 poems are short but they seem to convey as much meaning as my long poems
i love the way you wrote these
and one day i hope to read more and learn this style from you
thanks for sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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