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In Silence We Talk
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In Silence We Talk |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
In silence we talk And in darkness we walk Through that deep, dark Thing that swims as a shark Through our inner shafts And sanctums. For some the thing is guilt. On sin we long to forget, It is so shamelessly built. But fast and steady it is set, Never to move away, Never to die or sway. For some the thing is fear. It is some dark thing that crawls About in shadows within the heart. But we are afraid to seek and call It out of us. So it consumes us. In silence we talk about it. In darkness we walk about in it. But we never face It, not even in our deaths. We regret it for Now and then forevermore. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
your last stanza will be etched in my mind... i loved that conclusion, it made this poem all the better! great job bro ~JDR "I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking." |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thankyou for the compliments, Jeremy. I meant the poem as a warning to people who look for the "quick fix". We must face things, and gain strength from it. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I got the message from the start. Face your fears and learn from them. Nice one here. I really liked the way you expressed this. Always happy to read a poem of yours frac.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
already as i was reading the beginning of the poem it was blowing my mind away and then i got to the end!!! simply amazing... outstanding work!! "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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MidnightMaverick Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35Duluth, MN, USA |
Awesome piece of work! I enjoy reading your stuff very much. Keep up the good work! Midnight Maverick |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thanks, all, for the compliments. I liked the Alien films, and they inspired the darker imagery I used here. I'm glad that this worked out well. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"But we never face It, not even in our deaths. We regret it for Now and then forevermore." what more can i say...this says it all great work I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I agree with the others on the last stanza. it is very blunt and i like that in poems. Even though i don't really do it in mine as much as i should. *L*  Keep writing!!~Valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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