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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
i wrote this when i was snowbording and this is all i got out of it well i hope you like it. < !signature-->on the snow i do glide like an angle on the ride going fast is what i do that it why i'm in front of you jump ahead fly above land now like a dove carve in slow down because i'm on the ground come across finish line turn back look at time going to my right full place on the top all see my face with the gold around my neck i wake up what the heck on the wall i do see the gold medal and a pic of me somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun [This message has been edited by litle_krazy_poet (edited 01-30-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
It'd be cool if you wrote it WHILE snowboarding. Anyway nice one here. Hope you get many golds.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed this litle_krazy_poet! I could picture this well. I hope it becomes a reality for you ... gold medals, here you come!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, that would be cool. I remember getting odd looks for a poem i wrote while in the shower, and being asked "didn't the paper get wet?" ~_^ I know what you mean, though. I love the form... the way you use very short lines. Gives more of an impact. It also flowed beautifully. Well done. -Allan Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is a nice fresh, creative poem for the forum. Thanks for sharing it, I love it  (even though there's a typo at in the last stanza, oh well )."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
Dopy it would be real trick trying to write this poem "WHILE" i was snowbording lol. Kit: of you look at the last stanza it says that i won that gold and i really did well thanks. Allan: ya i can see that lol but i some times write poems and then write them later well thanks lakewalker: i changed the typo for you well bye bye |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
well congrats little thanks for sharing this poem i lvoed every line of it great narration of events again, congratulations I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Good Job at writing poems. Keep up the good work. I think snowboarding looks hard. I've been skiing before and personally I like control with both feet. See ya!~Catherine |
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