Teen Poetry #4 |
Moving Picture Boxoffice |
fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Moving Picture Boxoffice I've seen this before only on moving pictures (lies lies lies) What they said to you it doesn't interest me You are so lucky They told me the K was silent (like you couldn't notice) My evian's reflected in the spring A transparent transister but my visions too Laissez Faire. Pay attention to the future, she'll never see me there. Dreamings of the now raining and shuddering of my broken skin Watch me lose the pieces my heart's left in You see the same rain and shudder just as i i'm sorry it's tearing apart (in my dream its shredding your heart) Like in the moving pictures I would take...the rain as a kiss its what brought me here so it's how i shall leave Darkness except for each shimmering torch illuminated thousand fold by immortal's shows a road neither going nor leaving (to you) a crossroads diverging with convergence (one circle) Lie with me one day this circle will be me Reel of my life And the magical moving pictures i made for you --------------------- I'm kinda in a slump here. Sorry "This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
please don't be sorry, this is fantastic! |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
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fantastic is an understatement! fabulous work here; i really like your format. keep posting! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Don't be sorry. That's the last thing you should be after producing such an amazing poem. Wonderful work, Oz! I enjoyed this quite a bit. --Marie "Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising. So this old world must still be spinning ‘round, and I still love you."–James T. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I loved this poem. You shouldn't think you slumped cuz I'd tell you. Maybe you could have done better in your eyes, but from what I see here it rocked. I really liked this one. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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