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0 posted 2001-06-21 09:59 PM


ok last weekend i was at a punkrock show and i broke my foot but i wasn't moshing. well not at the time i broke my foot. this just a poem about mosh pits.

big guys.
the music blaring.
my adreniline pumping.
ppl beating ppl.

an elbow in the stomach.
being punched in the face.
OW! OW! OW!
that's all i can say.
my foot! my foot!

we rush to the er.
what's that blue bump on my foot?
it's broken they say.

hobble hobble that's me.
they call me gimp.
the one with the green cast on her leg.

what a birthday day.
19 years old and already my bones are breaking.
what an old geiser i am!
oh well!
things will happen.

ok i know this one isn't very good but i'm bored and felt like writting bout my broken foot.
robin


  

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1 posted 2001-06-21 10:11 PM


Haha.. breaking a bone doesn't mean you're an old geiser.  Gimp.. now that's just cruel!  Bad memories, bad memories  
ANYways... very cute here.  I enjoyed this.  Mosh pits can be destructive!  Thanks for sharing this.

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2 posted 2001-06-21 10:31 PM


i can't help it i love mosh pits! what happens happens.
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3 posted 2001-06-22 03:29 AM


They are dangerous....but if you like them then oh well.....can't stop u.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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4 posted 2001-06-22 10:05 AM


Hey,

    *Never goes in mosh pits* peoples have needles and heard of the things they do with them. such as shooting differnt drugs into you. Cute poem though   glad you didn't get hurt

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5 posted 2001-06-22 04:01 PM


I love the mosh pits!!!!rock on!!! I love the music and the feeling of lots of people...lol....ummmm

Regina

ps great poem!
feel better

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6 posted 2001-06-23 10:47 AM


Love mosh pits and this was a great poem that I really enjoyed to read.
Zu

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