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Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

0 posted 2001-06-16 04:20 PM

~CLOSED BY REQUEST OF AUTHOR~

Note: This poem is one I wrote a while ago, about a month. I wrote it for a member here at Passions. This one's for Peter. Here you go, love.
Enjoy all.
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Let us escape this world that breaks us
dismiss the trivial beings,
the commitments,
the overbearing -------,
and the contempt
that pins us down.

Let us find ourselves in a cheap one-night hotel,
in a room with cobwebs in the corners,
three channels on the dusty television,
faded sheets on the ancient bed--
a dim, filthy lamp hardly illuminating
the trash that slowly builds.

Let us come together when night falls
and make love in silence,
surrounded by a hundred candles
you feel my presence as I sense your purity,
join with me to transform this shell of scum
into a beautiful envelope of love.

Let us lay down in slumber, my arm on your stomach,
and my head against your chest,
watching you breathe, hearing you pulse,
admiring every quality you possess
in silence,
as I know your mouth will whisper my name when you wake.

Let us awake with the sun above us
and rise to paint colors in the sky,
you brushing my hair gently and
caressing my neck with your soft lips.
Come travel with me forever
and continue to illuminate this shell.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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1 posted 2001-06-16 04:25 PM

Great Work I really enjoyed the read as always.
Zu

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-06-16 04:37 PM

finally!!!

...but wow!...such beautiful images of love...the discription were amazingly real...its like it happened

...i really liked how you wrote this...awesome poem

...i loved this piece... a great tribute...hehehe...bye Marie

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-16-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-17 03:08 AM

I REALLY enjoyed this one Marie. Simply marvelous.....I edited one word out because of obvious reasons. No evilness ok?
Well done on this one! I really loved it!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-06-17 02:21 PM

Zu and Alby- Thanks

I'm glad you liked it

Javi - Yeah, I thought that would be edited

Ok, I'll try to refrain from evilness from now on

Hehe. Thanks for the comment.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

5 posted 2001-06-17 03:20 PM

Hey,

Welcome back to Passions, I am glad to see you posting again. This poem is very well-writen. Until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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