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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. 
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Finally, a free verse. Rhyming got old you guys- Sorry.  Save your sob story. I feel no sympathy for you. You aren't the victim here. Do you know what it's like for me? Or even more, for her? I can't even imagine what it's like to be her. To constantly feel humiliated, ashamed. All because of you. I hate you. How could you? I cry everytime I see her sleeping. Wondering what she is dreaming about and if I should wake her. "What if they are nightmares," I think. She's just a baby. A baby you made feel different. No apologies, no money, not even time can ever change that. She has so many questions she wants to ask, So many things she wants to say- But she's afraid. She's young, but she still understands. She knows that this is affecting everyone So she keeps quiet as to not upset anyone. She tiptoes around all of us When it's us that should be walking softly for her. It amazes me how she isn't bitter. How she still defends the pathetic-excuse-of-a-person that is you. I guess thats the "heart of a child" though. Always forgiving. Lucky you. Just remember... I'm not a child. And she won't always be. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 06-16-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!...jess...this was a powerful and heartfelt poem...so much emotions were written here...and the message was a real one...i can realte...what you are saying...i personally...really liked this poem...and from a childs point of view...its like tears are cried w/out knowing...why?...etc...and those children grow up with unknown scars that leads to pain in teenage years...i've been there..i hope this person...you are talking about...is doing alright...and if you need someone to talk...feel free to email ...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-16-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Jessica, the raw emotion in this piece is absolutely amazing. It's very true. The ending is my favorite part. It's true... things like this can affect children for years and years and they don't even have to know it. This is a very well written poem. Thanks for sharing it with us. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Jessica, the emotion and power in this one was simply mind blowing. I know what this is about and to even peer into your mind for a split second sends me off the planet with spasms of pleasure. I loved this one immensely. You really showed me how you felt, not only how you felt, but TRULY....how you TRULY feel about this whole situation. I really enjoyed this as I enjoy all your work and I am excitingly awaiting more from you. *hugs*  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh, WOW! Into my library! I am amazed. Truly amazed. What can I say? Wow! Rhonda  "Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school." |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow....what can i say...this is so awesome- you expressed yourself so well - and powerfully i must add....the situation sux yes but you told it well-it gave me goosebumps. keep posting...im becoming a fan..
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work Spice, I really enjoyed the read, well done Zu |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey, wow this poem kicked! i know EXACTLY what you're talking about in it. this is a piece i would be really proud of if i were you. great post! tis going in my library. thanks 4 the read. bye bye. -fear- |
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5_sweet_kisses Junior Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 49 |
OH my gursh I CAN SOOOO RELATE TO THIS!!! wow, keep up the great work... this is definately going into my library  Peeker  |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Like everyone said...this was simply amazing. There is no other way to describe it, the raw emotion and power just tug at you. Hope things get better.... ~Nikki~ |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hey guys... I just wanted to say a quick Thanks to all of you that have replied. I appreciate it. Your words are encouraging....so Thankyou. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very powerful words Jess. I just wonder who this is about. thanks for sharing. keep it up hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
oh my *hugs* this was very good and sad...i hope everything is ok. i loved the poem! one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Well Acire- The "she" in the poem is my little sister. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
thanks for clarifying that part hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
this was very thought provoking. i liked it.  fall hard, practice harder not to fall |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
This was amazing. I think it was giood that you left it as an unrhyming poem because it gave it its own sense of style. Some poems are just best left without rhyme however others make it better. This was truly great. Keep writing!   ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Crap jesa...this is outstanding! You're really good at free verse and there is a ton of power behind this. You should be extremely proud of this piece for the story it tells is worth a thousand images. Great job on this. Library here I come. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Oh Lizzy.. If you only knew the story behind this poem  Horrible...Reading it again made me cry...I had forgoten I had even posted this...And it's written in an old notebook so I haven't seen it since it has been posted. Anyway, Thanks for the kind words, LOL- Though I don't appreciate you pulling up all the other old BS poems of mine. HaHaHa I think I'll pay you back and pull up some of your older stuff...THat is, When I have time and it crosses my pea sized mind.  Anyway, Thanks again. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
just testing hi Sweets  , Lizzy  , Jesa  , Ina  , Allysa  , Marie  , Cherish  , Jenn  , Chelsea , Leah  , Kimmie  [This message has been edited by acire (edited 10-11-2001).] |
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