Not enough Time in the world to help me

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Teen Poetry #4

Not enough Time in the world to help me

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-06-15 04:34 PM

This poem belongs to a friend. His idea, brought it about. His little comments inbetween help form it. So I truly must say the poem is that of a friend's feelings.

"NOT ENOUGH TIME IN THE WORLD TO HELP ME"

The doors that opened a long time ago
have closed upon my hand....
The world continues to spin
while my world rocks in shambles'
bitter red happiness shows itself
challenging a sturdy soul
mocking what once was
rejecting the sadness
to show that the true meaning
is not of giving up
to embrace the smiles
of a foridden sun
twas the clouds of anger
that told me never to
forget
twas the suns of the horizons
who told me to smile
twas a small child
smiled upon a crying soul
to show that it is better
to be happy
and with then sun upon her
back the little child
vanished
leaving the crying soul
alone

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-06-16 03:01 PM

This was a niceone regi. Not my fav, but still good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-06-16 03:10 PM

the last lines were powerful...i really liked what you you wrote here

...enjoyed greatly...bye Ina

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-06-16 03:27 PM

Wow... that last line hit hard. This is very well written, Regi. Not the best from you, but still something to be proud of. Nice work.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection. Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2001-09-08 04:08 AM

oh this is really dark and rather an emotional piece. Like Marie and Albertia, the last few lines hit me hard.

Well done on this. I enjoyed reading it.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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