Teen Poetry #4 |
to a friend |
jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
Kissign her lips and holding her tight, Wipeing the from her eye and make thing feel right, Hush my dear don't say a word, I will love you past first second and third, So here we at my home, Darkness falls and were alone, I attept to kiss yu on the lips, But sunddly you grab my and take me for a trip, So now I wake up with a flower pot on my head, Thanking the stars that I'm not dead, Walking into the house holding my head, I turn to look to see her on my bed, I step back fearing for my life, Trying to remember what heppened last night, Going to bathroom taking some drugs, I notice that she is awake standing on my bear skin rug, She walk up to me and kisses me tight, And I think Alright, Leave alone that day and night, I search for the truth was what was right, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a nice one. Some of it kinda went around me, but I grasped most of it. Good one here I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
I do agree it is out there some where, Whaaat happened is whEN I was wrtting it my brain stoped Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Nice writing here Jytree. Although my mind isn't really in full on focus mode at the moment, I am pretty sure I grasped the concept. Excellent from what I could see. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is weird. But it's good! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I'm afraid I have to just say.... "huh??" I am totally losing you on this.... Is this a true story? Enlighten me. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
I am sorry this one is out there some where I think I was asleep when this happened so I am sorry Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
actually i thought it was good i thought it was kinda metaphoric i saw it this was..... "even when we're nice to some people, they end up still treating us bad, the at some point they act like everything is ok. Even after hurting us." well, that's my take on it I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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