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zarina
Member

since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

0 posted 2001-06-09 01:36 PM

Need you
Need you

nEEd  yOu  lIkE  i  nEEd  aIr
nEEd  yOu  lIke  i  need  tO bReatHe

Need you
        to be
              .here.
dont you
see
wont you
see

        Please
       Listen
      To
     Me

I      you
  NEED

dont    say    that
     I     dont
know   what    love  is
    dont   tell    me  that
I     dont   love  you

Cause I do

     Im
       Only
           Fourteen
                   But
                      I
                        Do
I may be      young
but I have    seen
I know what it FEELS like
when the one you love

d o n t  e v e n  c a r e

when you dont see
w h a t  t o m o r r o w  w i l l  b r i n g

When all is
DARK
And you want to
CRY

I know
Oh
I know

but - please - BELIVE -
     belive         in         me

its the HARDEST thing
when I tell you that
I need you
I care for you
I love you
And you respond
N O Y O U D O N T
its the hardest thing

that hurts
Cause I do
I really do
I do
      I do     I do
I do       I Do
   i dO  i do I DO

you should know that its true
I love you

you dont even care
do you?

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-06-09 02:01 PM

OOoo- I popping. I liked the way you wrote this one... Very different.
It sucks to be in that position though. Hope things get better.
Great job.
Keep posting.

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

2 posted 2001-06-09 03:04 PM

i like this...interesting way of writing it, it kinda gives it edge just by the way it looks...anyways...good job

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-09 03:08 PM

great use of format

...i liked it...the feelings was more showed through it...great job!...bye carina

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-06-10 01:27 AM

Wow......so emotional.....this is poetry at its finest. I REALLY enjoyed this poem. I truly thought that your formatting and style really put a HUGE amount of punch *wham!* within the poem. Awesome Job and very impressive work.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

zarina
Member

since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

5 posted 2001-06-10 05:21 AM

thanks alot...

It's not easy really. This person is quite older than me, and..well.. It wont work out. It's just a...mess. however, the poem 'someone' is also about him.

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