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HeAvEnS AnGeL
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0 posted 2001-06-04 01:27 AM


Something must be wrong with me,
If all I do is cry.
Sitting in my room alone,
Wishing I would die.

Something must be wrong with me,
If I never want to wake.
To just stay sleeping,
So I wont have to see my awful state.

Something must be wrong with me,
If I never smile.
And I hide all my feelings,
So I'm always in denile.

BUT WAIT!

Something must be worng with YOU,
If Your out to make me cry.
You want to make me unhappy,
Wishing I would die.

Something must be wrong with YOU,
To bug me everyday.
To hope that I don't come to school,
Hoping in bed is where I stay.

Something must be wrong with YOU,
If you are such a fool.
To make my life a living hell,
How can you be so cruel?

What have I ever done to you?
To make you hate me so bad?
I have never even met you!
But still you make me sad.

So something must be wrong with YOU,
If you enjoy To see me sad.
You think your so cool,
Because you treat people bad.

But sometime in the future,
Your share is yet to come.
So You can sit there and cry,
And know where I am coming from.



© Copyright 2001 Ashley - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
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1 posted 2001-06-04 01:31 AM


ooooh..you talking to me ashy? hehehe..i know yer not.. ...but then again im not really sure who you are talking to in this poem....ill need an explaination...*scratches head* .
its a good poem though but i have to admit its not the best ive read from you *ouch ouch dont hit me ok??*...enjoyed the read very much thank you..will be back for the explaination..




"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

n e where
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since 2001-05-30
Posts 32
Australia
2 posted 2001-06-04 02:50 AM


i really like this poem and i hope ur situation if its real gets better!

much props..

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel.

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3 posted 2001-06-04 03:02 AM


I liked this but it was kind of confusing, like cherish asked, can I have a explanation please?
I did enjoy this ash.....hope to see more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-06-04 03:11 AM


the way you  rote it is very confusing as all have said...too much back and forth in change of the talker etc...i liked it...hope to see what happens with the xplanation ...bye Ashley

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HeAvEnS AnGeL
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5 posted 2001-06-04 03:39 PM


Lol hey everyone well hmm... How to explain this poem... Well it's about a girl who sits at home and picks on herself because people make fun of her and give her a hard time, but then she reilizes that it's not her fault that people make fun of her and treat her bad they are just being stupid and they are immature. I hope that kinda made things a little clearer for yah all!

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

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