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Sincerely, Elizabeth
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Sincerely, Elizabeth |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Err...I don't know what this is. call it odd or just a vent. It needed to be let out. To TN, Who would have thought, I would be writing to you? Surprised are you to find, I'm still alive and breathing? Do you actually have any real idea, Of just what you did to me? What you contributed to? What you were a trigger for? Months of pain and nightmares, Eating away at my mind. These feelings drugging me, With me unable to stop them. Do you smile over there? Do your parents know what you really are? Mine do and so do my brothers, Isn't that warning enough? Tell me, how are your sleeping patterns? Do you toss and turn, Wanting to rip out your eyes and scramble your brain, For just one night of peace? This ache that rips out my heart, Has your name written all over it. I certainly don't pine for you, I pine for my life back. The way I am and who I now am, Is really all your fault. You couldn't have cared for just one moment, Couldn't have just showed one scrap of concern. Now I'm in a maze of destruction, Soon the puzzle will be solved. If only I hadn't been so stupid, And let you get close to me. If you think I'm admitting something, Think again you psycho. Just once I want you to feel this hurt, And bleed from the inside out like me. Thanks for being the one button, That shouldn't have been pressed. Thanks for putting me in a cage, And throwing away the key. Sincerely, Elizabeth Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
strong emotions...it was hard for me to read this...cuz it made me think of a situiation i was in...*sigh*...you expressed so well...hope you stay strong...eJ...as i know you will  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-29-2001).] |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
wow i hate to think about wut this person did to u and put u through. you expressed urself well in this. such raw emotion. i hope it helped u to put it down. good luck with all and great poem. this is going to my library. *hugs* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sad liz. I see that somebody put you through some pain. If you'd ever like to talk about it and have someone sincerely care and listen to you, then me. I enjoyed this, and yes I'd classify this as a poetic rant Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
uhm...ok. Some serious pain in this poem so you know I like it. I'm sorry whatever happened to you was that painful though. Bet your brothers are gunna have some fun though... "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Beat him up!!!! HAHAHA and have a hundred pizzas put on his credit card and delievered to his house...LOL j/k this really sucks, I can relate to this pretty well... I thought this was soooooo well written. *hugs* to you!! Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
LMAO Thanks Jenn! That sounds like a marvellous idea.  Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
awwwwwww lizzy you want me to drive over there and beat the crap outta this guy for you?..hehhe...my dad looks like a bikey...he could walk in the door and scare the daylights outta anybody..you want me to bring him along? on the serious side to this i thought that this was a powerful poem/rant with all the rhetorical questions you posed and the way it was presented in a letter form...good stuff hun...more says i ..MORE!
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I had no idea you carried so much pain in your heart. I've always thought of you as being happy go lucky. This poem is so strong and staright to the point I could almost feel your pain. I guess we all go thru situations that really do hurt us a lot. Hope things are fine now Lizzy. Thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
DIE TN! DIEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!! *breathes* I'm okay. EJ, I never saw this one coming...  *hugs* Hope you feel better. I liked your emotions here. Keep it up! -Leah |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
Wow... I'm errr... well I'm lost for words.. I must admit, this wasn't what I was expecting. Infact, you did a good job of ripping whatever expectation I had apart, throwing it on the floor and stomping on it a few times!! This was real, not fake like a lot of the crap I've read, and the trueness and rawness of the emotion really grabbed me. I had to stop and think. Really think. It's a beautiful piece of writing in a very sad way, and I'm nothing but sorry that you had to experience something that obviously hurt you badly, to write something like this. But the good thing about venting, is the sense of self-satisfaction that goes with it. So now, I guess you will find you can get on with it easier.. *shrugs* ..if nothing else, from the replies, it's obvious you're among friends. Wood_Stock. "A forgotten man once told me, a mirror holds but a reflection, but a reflection holds more than a mirror. Take a look at yourself." |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
that was really good I loved how you just expresed you emotions no hold bared so to speak it was really good in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Who's TN? if you want I can send the lads round and sort him out  , great work EJ lots of pain shown here but A very good read.Zu "Death solves all problems, no man, no problem" J.V.Stalin 1918. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
OMG! This is so amazing. You have captured every feeling I had when I was with... It doesn't matter, but she has ruined my life and left me a completely changed person, and the change wasn't for the better. Awesome piece, this is in my library. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
wow EJ that was awesome!!! you did a wonderful job!!! *hugz* if you ever need to talk feel free to email me or talk my ear off on the net! I dont mind!  I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was such an awesome poem! I really enjoyed this...amazing write!!! good job but tough situation...::hugs:: |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
Wow. This has such strong emotion. It really makes me wonder about everything that contributed to this poem. Your work is great; keep posting! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I liked the poem a lot. I know that you will get through this. We are all here for you.  (This smiley makes me laugh every time, so I figured you'd appreciate it)*~*Amanda*~* |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh wow. Can I hurt him? Please? That sounds familiar. The poem, I mean. If you ever need someone to talk to... Things will get better, I promise you. You will become yourself again. It may take a long while, and it may be a painful road, but once you become yourself again, you'll look back on this and say to yourself, "wow, I've grown a lot because of this". That is an awesome poem, but I'm sorry you had to get hurt in order to write it. Remember: it WILL get betterRhonda  "Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school." |
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