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LoneWolf
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0 posted 2001-05-25 08:05 PM


“Ruptured Hope”

Ruptured hopes
Upon shattered dreams
Grasping for love
Yet there is none it seems

Unknown to life
And all its glories
Dreading to wake up
And face each new morning

Dreading the days
Fearing the nights
My dreams are like torture
Showing me visions of your light

Unable to mend
That which has been done
I stutter upon this path
Not knowing where to turn

All the while
Vainly clutching
Unto my ruptured hopes
And shattered dreams



It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

[This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 05-25-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-05-25 08:10 PM


this is really sad...hope you are ok    SEA
Low Man's Lyric
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2 posted 2001-05-25 08:25 PM


This poem is awesome but I found this line a little odd "Showing me visions of you light". Did you mean to put "your" instead of "you"? Well good job of the three poems that I have read today from you. Keep on posting.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."  
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3 posted 2001-05-25 09:32 PM


graet poem!!...written very nicely...i enjoyed the read...thanks for sharing it and hope to see more... ...?

ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!




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4 posted 2001-05-26 06:38 PM


Quite sad here, but I enjoyed it. Hope all is well.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-05-27 04:07 PM


Wow.  This was a very sad poem but Just remember to keep smiling for the happiness will always drown out the sadness  

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

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In a dream world
6 posted 2001-05-27 04:25 PM


this IS really sad...

make me cry why don't you!!  
just kidding!! hope to read more from you in the future!!

*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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7 posted 2001-05-28 11:15 AM


Indeed it is a moving piece but keep strong. Your last stanza I found to be very powerful.

Keep 'em coming.  

~AF~

Know what you want. Become your real self.
~ David Harold Fink ~

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8 posted 2001-05-28 11:44 AM


Great work LoneWolf I really enjoyed the read, very powerful indeed  
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