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Ruptured Hope
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Ruptured Hope” Ruptured hopes Upon shattered dreams Grasping for love Yet there is none it seems Unknown to life And all its glories Dreading to wake up And face each new morning Dreading the days Fearing the nights My dreams are like torture Showing me visions of your light Unable to mend That which has been done I stutter upon this path Not knowing where to turn All the while Vainly clutching Unto my ruptured hopes And shattered dreams It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you th [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is really sad...hope you are ok  SEA |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
This poem is awesome but I found this line a little odd "Showing me visions of you light". Did you mean to put "your" instead of "you"? Well good job of the three poems that I have read today from you. Keep on posting. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
graet poem!!...written very nicely...i enjoyed the read...thanks for sharing it and hope to see more...  ...?ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!! [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Quite sad here, but I enjoyed it. Hope all is well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Wow. This was a very sad poem but Just remember to keep smiling for the happiness will always drown out the sadness  Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
this IS really sad... make me cry why don't you!!  just kidding!! hope to read more from you in the future!!  *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Indeed it is a moving piece but keep strong. Your last stanza I found to be very powerful. Keep 'em coming. ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work LoneWolf I really enjoyed the read, very powerful indeed Zu |
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