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My Fair-Haired Gift
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My Fair-Haired Gift |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
This piece was influenced by E.E. Cummings. It is an eccentric style, but it works comfortably when you neglect the parenthesis the first time you read it. Try and guess what the gift is  It's obvious.-My Fair-Haired Gift- eyes of steel (cold too) inwards you reel towards my lips (tender skin) with jointing hips and…(just when you thought it was safe) a kiss transpires (meaningful) the red sky fires blasts gleam overhead (fireworks of love) uniting us in thread and…(just when you thought it was over) again it lives (never died though) romantic night gives moments creating memory (outlined well) an everlasting specialty -Knightfellow "If you had a choice to believe in yourself, or another person, who would it be?" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! I liked this poem very much! I love E.E. Cummings. I thought this was great. Is the gift love? I don't know, i tried. Nice one here, hope to see more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Wow, never have I seen a style so daring as this... the words were so special.. I am thinking that the Gift is a girl because "hair" is contained in the title... WELCOME TO PASSIONS. Cant wait to read more. ~JDR "Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I love E. E. Cummings. He wrote with great style. I think you did a wonderful job of captureing this in your poem. I could never write anything this good. I really enjoyed it. Good work. ~Jason ps I actually learned something from your this thread. I had always thought that E. E. Cummings had changed his legal name to all lower case, like how he signed his poems (e. e. cummings.) So when I saw every one refering to him as E. E. Cummings I did some ivestigating and found that, that is absolutly false. His official name is still E. E. Cummings, so if any one else was lied to, now you know too... To read for your self "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a wonderful poem. The style of the great E. E. Cummings isn't easily imitated, but you do it great justice. I can't wait to see more of your work. PS-check your e-mail "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Welcome! I must say this was very interseting. I am looking forward to reading more of you work. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Cool. This was different, I don't know much of Cummings's work, but I am sure you did him justice. The gift is probably a woman. xoxo Jenn< !signature--> "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 01-24-2001).] |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow! welcome to passions. e.e. cummings is amazing, and you pulled off his style. congrats. im waiting to see more. regina |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
great poem i loved it! keep it up |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
jeremy n jenn nailed it... its about my girl friend.. thanks to all who replied... -Knightfellow "If you had a choice to believe in yourself, or another person, who would it be?" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions I hope you like it here, great job on this poem!!! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Fearless_Angel Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57Calgary, AB Canada |
~*WaSsUp?*~ Welcome to passions. I hope you find this place as wonder as I do. Everyone here is alwayz happy to help with problems 24/7 and it's just a happy, kewl place to relax and look at other people's talents as well as displaying your own. Anyways, kewl poem. I like it. It's got neat style! Well, I've gotta bounce now...keep writing! Lotsa Love, Angel xoxoxo |
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