Teen Poetry #4 |
layers of our lifes |
knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
umm i hope this makes sense to you and i hope you likes it...*hugs* our life is made up of layers built up one at a time layers of our past covered up by layers of our present the past maybe covered with a new layer but the layer of the past came before the present it will always be there just under the surface always be there under the rest you cant erase the past, kill it, or wish it out of existence it will always be there as another layer a layer of the past covered up by the new you cant will away the present or change what is coming it will always come just as another layer a layer of the present that covers up the past we are trapped in the cycle of the present circling around the core of the past the past before the present the present covering up the past a layer of the present upon a layer of the past the past under the present our life is made up of layers built up one at a time “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” "You say i only hear wut i want too..." [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-13-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this is very true in my opinion...great job on writing this poem..and i had written a poem and very similar meaning....i liked it and keep writing... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
Ahhh, i love it, i love the layers theme. Great poem. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Shouldn't it be "Layers of our Lives" ? Heh, anyways...awesome poem. Got me to thinkin'. Great job Tiffers. ~Carly "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Interesting read Tiff In the future, just try to refrain from using the same word over and over but all in all, interesting read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Interesting Read Tiff, I liked it loads although I got the distinct impression that you like the word layer a bit... anyway I await your next work. Mr mr Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
It's a little bit difficult to follow, but that's probably just my blonde mind having a hard time comprehending anything at all, lol...But I really liked the concept here, you did well. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed it, but not your best work. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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