Teen Poetry #4 |
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Losing Battle |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
sorry if theres any mistakes in this or w/e im in a hurry....late for a weddin ![]() You finally lost the battle You struggled for so long Spent years trying to defeat Something more powerful then you You fooled yourself into thinking YOu had gained a foot hold Then you lost your grip And sunk down deeper then before You played the game very well Better tehn anyone else had You realized that to win you have to lose For no one can escape the grasp of death “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” "u say i only here wut i want too..." [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-12-2001).] |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Wow, very powefull, I like it alot, especially the end. Oh, and hope you got to the wedding in time ![]() Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
"You realized that to win you have to lose" I liked those lines the best. Great piece. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
You finally lost the battle You struggled for so long Spent years trying to defeat Something more powerful then you.. those verses gave me something to think about...thanks for the read..i liked it... ![]() if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
Groovy or yia ![]() Castles made of sand slip into Sea eventually... |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the two pieces i've read by you this morning have been incredible, i like this a lot. great job on this poem, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Tiffy girl.....this is really touching. Sometimes letting go and loosing this fight is the right thing.....it's never easy tho. ![]() |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's not the fight that matters, but how life is lived before it eventually comes. very emotional piece. thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was nice. I enjoyed it tiff! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cheerleader_gal4life New Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 6 |
Wow Tiffany. That was a great poem. You are good at it. Oh and I hope the wedding goes well. God Bless, Cherish |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
*shall sum this awesome and amazing piece up in one word* FUNKY ben i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it |
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