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My new song... Hey it's kinda poetry!! -LOST LOVER-
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My new song... Hey it's kinda poetry!! -LOST LOVER- |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
Enjoy! Any comments would be happily accepted. - Lost Lover - What we have together. I wish it now & then forever. A simple peace I hold inside. A feeling so strong, I can't deny. Water ripples, currents change. What I feel for you, will remain the same. You left me here, wondering why? I think of you now, as I look to the sky. We used to lye here together. Don't you remember? Looking to the stars. Listening to the passing cars. But then you left, without goodbye. There was a time I thought I'd die. Such confusion never known. An idea of love, never outgrown. I want you. I need you. I love you. I seek you. To be with you is like nothing I know, We could have taken it fast, but we took it slow. I wanted to enjoy every second spent, You left me here, heart-broken, my mind bent. Sickness comes I cannot hide, To think all along we were a lie. It can't be so, because I knew you, And deep inside, I know you felt for me too. So, close your eyes and take a moment to look inside, A feeling remains from which you cannot hide. A part of me has stuck with you, A memory of an ancient youth. My eyes can see through your transparent skin, I can see your heart beating deep within. Your soul so bright, it blinds my eyes, This is not the first time I have cried. I want you. I need you. I love you. I seek you. I love you, I need you, I seek to find you. I wanted to keep you near me. But it seems you had a different plan of what was to be. I respect your decision on what you need, Though, I wish you could get it all from me. My mind seeks to find some excuse, Confused, frustrated, it binds the noose. We used to lie here together. Don't you remember? Arms surrounding each other, Our lives entwined, in one another. I'm sure one day we'll meet again, I'll look at you and forget the pain. For, I'd stop the world to be with you, The skies that are grey, will return to blue. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This is really good, you can tell that its a song it flows just like one. I like it alot, you portrayed your emotions very well. A great read.  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice work. Very nice work, in fact. I really enjoyed this song... there are a lot of very memorable lines in it. I could imagine getting this stuck in my head. If you get an mp3 file for this, let me know.  Oh and welcome to Passions in Poetry! Take a seat, read a few poems, write a few poems, and have fun sharing and learning. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
Hey thanks alot. Your comments are much apreciated. |
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ScarletPoetess Junior Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 18 |
Welcome to Passions This is an awesome first post. It rocked. I'm glad to see I'm not the only new member I can't wait to read more. Scarlet |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome! Please check your email for a special greeting! SEA |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Welcome to Passions!! this is a great first post and a great song. i could hear the music in my head when i read it. i know you'll love it here and i look forward to reading lots more of your work in the future. keep sharing with us Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! The song was a little long but I definitle enjoyed the read. Hope we could play MP3s in here  Hope you enjoy Passions in Poetry as we all do. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
welcome..i really enjoyed the song..and it did seem like a poem even tho..it was a song..anyways..i thought you did quite well...thanks for sharing and keep writing  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Welcome to Passions! I really enjoyed this. Yep yep, like Allan said, lots of memorable lines. MP3's rawk! I can't wait to see more..peace! ~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Welcome to Passions Good job on this song, I hope you enjoy your stay here "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ignore all those who wants MP3's....that's all they care about hehe.... anyway welcome to Passions. I really enjoyed the song. I felt you did quite well on it!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Welcome to passions Great song... mp3's bah... Mr mr Zu. " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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