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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
im standing right before you yet you dont even see i talked at you till im hoarse yet you dont even hear ive taken all that i can take yet you dont even know ive lost my will to hold on yet you dont even care ive walked away from you yet you dont even see ive told you that im gone yet you dont even hear im not the same weakling i was yet you dont even know im not there with you anymore yet you dont even care “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... no title ideas... but I did like the poem. Nice work here, TiffAy.  |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
hey tiff, guess what? im so smart....hehe i think i can help you find that poem you lost....well if you havent found it yet. you can go to your profile and at the top theres a link that says *show all posts by this registered user* and there ya go...but i dont know a title for this poem....*feels sad now* but i helped you with one problem! go me..hehe Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
lol thanks for the help!!!!!!! it didnt work cuz technically it was never posted! but you attempted to help  so yay for you!!!tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
*sigh* i tried Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this Tiffany. I thought it was creative the way you used the same lines in both stanzas. I've seen you use a lot of HTML in your poems, and it works really well here. Nice work. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
usually im not one to judge by formats..but this one stands out..i like it..and i like the meaning of your poem..good job! *KiM* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done on the poem. Simply wonderful.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Tiff, the use of italics in this piece really amplified the meaning. I really liked reading this as it is something that really can be applied to one of my friends' situation at the moment. Thanks for the read.  ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
good job on this poem, i've been thinking on a title for a while now and i still can't think of anything good. the best i can do is: your blind imaginings, so i think i'll stop while i'm ahead keep posting all your work.Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Great write Tiffy girl.... as for a title, I think simply "Yet" would work SEA |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I liked the way you turned things arounf Tiff. That was really a good one. keep em coming "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job...i liked the poem tiff...and keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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