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knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

0 posted 2001-04-30 09:33 PM

im drowning in this darkness
breathing it in as air
i cant survive with out it
but how can i with it?

im locked in that box of darkness
pounding on the walls
searching for escape
dying slowly for lack of air

panicking as i struggle
but only wasting more precious life
the life that i breathe
the breath of darkness

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

1 posted 2001-04-30 10:54 PM

I liked this, it was really honest.

I also Loved your Signature, how true, how true

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-30 11:27 PM

I enjoyed this......drowning in darkness doesn't sound too much fun.
I hope all gets well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

broken wing
Junior Member

since 2001-04-30

Posts 37

3 posted 2001-05-01 01:10 PM

I liked this alot. I can relate to it.

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

4 posted 2001-05-01 01:26 PM

Hey,

I…I…I really liked this its really good I am not quite sure why but I think its going to be one of my favorite. Until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-05-09 06:11 PM

I like the way you wrote this
~*gives a hug*~
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 05-09-2001).]

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

6 posted 2001-05-09 06:12 PM

tiff..
dont u worry..you will see the light..
this poem was very deep..enjoyed it..
keep it up!

$ Jeff $ : )

"If I'm not back in 5 minutes......just wait longer!"

"You may take our lives, but you'll never take our FREEDOM!

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-05-09 09:11 PM

Aww, the box of darkness can be fun.... just take the time to do some thinking.

I thought this was a good poem.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

8 posted 2001-05-09 09:15 PM

drowing in darkness...OUCH good job hun
*KiMMiE*

sleepymoongirl
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

9 posted 2001-05-09 09:57 PM

that was cool. i sure hope u don't feel traped. if u need someone to talks to ya know u can alwayz talks to me

i won't mind! loves ya from me poem was awesome

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

10 posted 2001-05-10 03:33 AM

hey...tiff? i really liked the meaning and the way you have wrote this..its a very good poem...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-10-2001).]

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