Teen Poetry #4 |
drowning |
knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
im drowning in this darkness breathing it in as air i cant survive with out it but how can i with it? im locked in that box of darkness pounding on the walls searching for escape dying slowly for lack of air panicking as i struggle but only wasting more precious life the life that i breathe the breath of darkness “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I liked this, it was really honest. I also Loved your Signature, how true, how true |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this......drowning in darkness doesn't sound too much fun. I hope all gets well. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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broken wing Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 37 |
I liked this alot. I can relate to it. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I…I…I really liked this its really good I am not quite sure why but I think its going to be one of my favorite. Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I like the way you wrote this ~*gives a hug*~ keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 05-09-2001).] |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
tiff.. dont u worry..you will see the light.. this poem was very deep..enjoyed it.. keep it up! $ Jeff $ : ) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Aww, the box of darkness can be fun.... just take the time to do some thinking. I thought this was a good poem. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
drowing in darkness...OUCH good job hun *KiMMiE* |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
that was cool. i sure hope u don't feel traped. if u need someone to talks to ya know u can alwayz talks to me i won't mind! loves ya from me poem was awesome as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hey...tiff? i really liked the meaning and the way you have wrote this..its a very good poem... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-10-2001).] |
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