Teen Poetry #4 |
What I Want But Can't Have |
LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
“what I want, but can’t have” When I near you Why do you turn away? I only want to hold you To hold you forever and always When I talk with you Why do you scream and yell? I only want to say To say that I love you When others are there Why do I feel as though you don’t want me I only want to be there To be there for you When I want to be with you When I want to hold you When I want love you Why do I feel as though…. As though you don’t want me here Ok just so you all know this poem wasn't written about me. but rather for a friend of mine who is have trouble with his g/f right now. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
glad it's not for you....it's very sad....I hope everything works out for your friend SEA |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh ouch. That must not be a fun situation for your friend. Writing from someone else's perspective is difficult to accomplish, you did so nicely. Well done. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
the poor guy. this is written well you can feel the emotion. (don't really care how corney that might sound) keep it up ~kate if you don't let them in they can't see the real you |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Awwww. I like this one, but I don't like the way the situation sounds. Good luck to your friend. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sad....i hope things work out.. full of emotions u put in this poem.. great job.. and keep writng ...? death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was good. Sorry about the bad times. Hope all goes well. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Your friend needs to find a girl that isnt gonna treat him this way. I know Im not perfect with my boyfriend but you shouldnt act like that if you care about someone. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
That's o sad.... But Erin's right, he should find a girl who'll appreciate him. the poem itself is ok, the situation caught my eye. No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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