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Terryloveiris_85
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

0 posted 2001-04-24 04:41 PM

A cherished thought,
may soon become reality.
For finally my love,
you see.

A cherished thought,
of a love once fulfilled.
But that is history,
and so that love was killed.

A cherished thought,
of a couple made to be.
Thier love was everlasting,
and not from love did they flee.

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-24 06:03 PM

I like the beginning line of each stanza, you did a wonderful job.
The title is a tad predictable though.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-04-24 06:15 PM

great job on the poem
i liked it..
keep writng

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-04-24 08:40 PM

I believe you did really good. I'm very impressed on this one. Thanks for sharing. keep it up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-04-24 08:43 PM

The repitition works really well with the thought you have. I enjoyed this quite a bit.
Nice work!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-24 10:33 PM

Great job here! I enjoyed it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

6 posted 2001-04-25 03:58 AM

i liked this one i liked the other on i rad by you a little more but they are both really good thank you for the read

ben redshaw the great

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

7 posted 2001-04-25 11:00 AM

heheh..great poem terryloveris....no
actually i LOVED this poem...can you guess WHY????

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

Starr
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since 2001-02-08

Posts 100

8 posted 2001-04-25 02:29 PM

Great poem....
I liked the beginning of each stanza.
Good writing!
Keep posting!

Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

Chel
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

9 posted 2001-04-25 04:33 PM

Great work. Keep it up.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Always remember compliments you received; forget about the rude

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