Teen Poetry #4 |
A typical day |
Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
I’ve been wondering around In circles of confuseness Surrounded by the ocean waves And their sweet making sound Writing a poem about a girl Who deserves true love Because of the beauty she brings To everything in this world Walking on a rainy day I’m cold and freezing Everything around is sulking wet The sky’s black versus gray Been going for a walk On another typical day With the wind in my hair Just hearing the trees talk |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Duncha mean confusion? Hehehehehe. Nice werk! you be koo. ~Carly There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I have no clue why this has already gone passed 100 poems down and it only had 1 reply....geesh! Sorry i was delayed a day or two in replying. ANyhow......yea carly is right about the word correction. I liked the poem....good job on it. Hope to see more....you oughta start replying more too....maybe that's why some people aren't replying to you....cuz you don't reply to them....oh well....have fun...peace. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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