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MidnightMaverick Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35Duluth, MN, USA |
Look See Take heed She who holds your heart will fold No Stop Don't look at me like that Clocks tick People kiss and hearts are broken Days fly by without end Stars fall people cry then begin again Does it make sense Collaborate Collate your life is like a xerox the same thing endless timeless expansion no passion care to give some compassion I don't want none of your action You can't give me satisfaction i hate you love I love you hate See Look it's all it took give me what you want don't taunt made you look There's no pension or redemption that's all folks it's all she wrote |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was a crazy format, one I really enjoyed reading. The thoughts made my mind spark to places they haven't visited in a while. Great job. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this was awesome. i've never seen anything like this before!  i like it... I WANNA SEE MORE. heheheheValerie *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a nice one. Not your best, but the format does prove to show creativity with boosts up the poem. I thought the message was nice. Good one here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this one is good, nice job on it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
the format is amazing this is a perfect example of changing the meaning of the poem by changing the format great work here keep em coming i would like to see more of this too  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Very interesting poem, I really like how it flows with so many ideas and so little space. Truely a good poem |
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