Teen Poetry #4 |
What Do I Say? |
CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
This is a poem I wrote about a girl before I asked her out. It was the first time I had ever asked somebody out and was very nervous. I know that the poem doesn't have a very good flow, but I thought I would share it with you all. My favorite part of the poem is the last two lines, which I have used as a poem in theirself to express my feelings to some people. "What Do I Say?" What do I say If I feel this way I say whatever I may But what will I hear? I'll say how I feel I'll say what I believe And sink in the sand Then I'll leave, kneel, And pray you understand I sink in the sand And I can't walk on water I don't have supernatural powers But I can send flowers And talk for hours and hours Living from memories Living from thoughts There are some things in life That cannot be taught Lessons on life Lessons on love Can only be explained one way: They come from above - Cody |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
aww this is sweet. good job. keep writing! ~ab~ *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked it.....thought it was sweet. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very sweet.. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice, asking someone out is never easy the first time. (apparently) Good job on this poem, and about using the last lines as a way to explain to people, I'd advise you to be careful who you say that to... you may offend a few people. Just some friendly advice of course. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
"I don't have supernatural powers But I can send flowers" those are my favorite lines in this one, i really like that a lot. this was really sweet, i hope everything worked out and she said yes great job on this, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yeah I liked this, as they said, it was sweet. Nice job. ~Carly There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
i thought this was sweet...i liked it good job! ~ jo~ |
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