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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-04-16 10:40 AM

I had a dream that you loved me,
that at least you would see,
How I adored you so,
But that was just a dream,
And you stay oblivous to my love,
And I stay without your love,
But I had a dream,
That you were in love,
With only me............

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

1 posted 2001-04-16 10:51 AM

Hey,

I liked it but its not as good as your other works. Its a great poem though

Until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-04-16 11:36 AM

Hmm.. tough situation. One that I'm sure many have been in at one point or another.
Anyway, this is a well written poem. You expressed yourself very well.. I liked it.
Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-04-16 03:41 PM

This was great. I liked this one a lot. Short and good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

4 posted 2001-04-16 03:46 PM

Short and sweet, A very good poem and a message that we can all identify with.
<<_Andrew_>>

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

E-mail/Msn: Targetmrzu@hotmail.com

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2001-04-16 04:39 PM

Well i hope that your dream comes true

~

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-04-17 09:40 AM

I thought this was good, but not your best work. i think that the theme is a very good one and you might try expanding on the central idea a little more, bit it's just a thought. keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

7 posted 2001-04-17 10:19 AM

I think I agree w/ the others. Not your best work, but it was still good. Keep posting.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

8 posted 2001-04-17 11:06 AM

"And you stay oblivious to my love"

I like this line because most topics from dreams mean so much to the dreamer but the people who it may be about are usually oblivious to the dream. I liked this poem and I enjoyed reading it1 Keep up the good work

Truly appreciative
^*~Kicking Kim~*^

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