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Torn between two hearts.
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Torn between two hearts. |
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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne 
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When you love some one so dearly, you dont ever want that love to end. But when someone else you love comes along, you suddenly want it to end. Your heart is breaking deep inside, you wish you werent alive. Your heart is crying, everyday. For someone to understand. No-one understand what goes on, in your little heart. But all you need is one of your lovers, to slowly drift away. no comment on what this is about... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... this one is not your usual style. You seem to be exploring other areas of poetry, and that is very good. Personally I didn't really care for this poem a lot technically, but I did like the message and emotion in it. Very good job.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Well I can relate to the no-one-understanding thing...this was a good poem, thanks for sharing it. ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
great post. i can relate to what your talking about, so i hope it works out. everything is skin deep |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
im sticking with allan on this one..its cool that your trying new ways of poetry..and the idea is good (its what comes from the heart that counts) but i do think ive seen better from you...but still..good job! *ME* ouch..didnt mean to be harsh!!! " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
im sticking with allan on this one..its cool that your trying new ways of poetry..and the idea is good (its what comes from the heart that counts) but i do think ive seen better from you...but still..good job! *ME* ouch..didnt mean to be harsh!!! " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I didn't like the structure of this poem. But the expression behind it was beautiful. However, I didn't really care for the message either. I don't believe that you can be in love with two people at once, and if you think you are, then you weren't really in love with one of them in the first place. Does that make any sense? I just don't think that it's so easy to end one relationship in which you were in love so quickly for someone else. Hmm. sorry for rambling. Nice job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought that the topic of this poem kind of related to something i am going through. I liked the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hmmm....this poem just made me think sarah it was al;so written in a form of pain..as for what u r going thru as if this is the present or past hope things worked out for u had to make a difficult chocie but was happy with it or if its a present thing hope u feel better bout stuff. i reaaly hope things get better for urself and ur life.... |
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