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Saying Goodbye for a New Love
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Saying Goodbye for a New Love |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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There is something of I’m sure, This thing we share called love. Each day you hold me, I’m sure you’re sent from above. It hasn’t been all that long, But I’ve fallen in love with you. Even from the first day, I was in love and knew. I was supposed to marry him, But I’d found love in another. I ended it with him, Once I saw you I wouldn’t take any other. It’s been nearly 4 months, Since I told him goodbye. Since then I’ve had tears, Flowing from my eye. At first I wondered, If it was a mistake. When I looked at my ex, His tears, I could not take. The pain I caused him, Was hurting me too. He looked at me, And at once he knew. He knew I loved another, He knew there was nothing to do. He just looked at me, And said, “I love you”. www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow... i think this is one of the best ive read of yours i really enjoyed uit but your ex is going to have to accept what happened nice job ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... I disagree with Jeremy. If your ex still has feelings for you, try to find some comfort in him. Give it another shot, at least. Great poem. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
a very nice one Tamma. best wishes to u. ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I agree with Allan. It really hurts to still love someone when they don't return the love.And you know the love is true when you're still in love with someone who is not in your life. I'm talking from personal experience. Actually, it's still going on and it sucks. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice poem. I would just stay focused on who I have at the moment.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem is really good because it explains two people's emotions well. Great job, and I agree with Dopey. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
The greatest love is the love that is never returned....he may be hurting now, and he may still be hurting a year from now, but as long as you know in your heart you were right... I'm sorry this had to happen to you, I know how much it sucks.... ABOUT THE POEM....i thought it was lovely, it told us truthfully all you felt, and didn't hold back anything. I loved it! ~BECKY |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I truly agree with Allen on this one. You should give it one last shot you never know what might come of it. Great poem also |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Okies, first things first, Great Poem, I loved it, you have done an extremely good job of this one... Secondly, I disagree with both Jeremy and Allan, I think you should talk to your ex about the love you once shared and tell him that you still care about him, but you can't be with him, you have found someone else whom you love all the same... Im not saying that you should or shouldn't go back with him, as everyone tells me... follow your heart, it will tell you the right thing to do... Good Luck and I hope that it all turns out for the best for you!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm gonna have to agree with Mels on this Geez, everyone is giving their opinion  You're probably so confused now  he he heBut i do agree with Jer when he said that this probably so far is your best poem At least, that Ive read too I see that there's more feelings in your newer poems. keep it up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Allan, Jon, and Angel: First of all, there is more to the story than the poem states...Yea, we were engaged, yea, I broke it off so I could be with Justin (whom I care for much deeper than the ex). Second of all, the "ex" is over 500 miles away...and I'm lucky if I see him once every 6 months. And about 3 months into the engagement, he said he wanted to "see other people, but still date", I agreed, and I dated 4 guys before I met Justin and when I met Justin, I wanted to have a relationship with him, and only him...and I didn't want to have to tell in 10 months him that I could no longer be with him, cuz i was going to marry someone else. Still think I should give the "ex" another chance????? www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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