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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Death” The tidings of sorrow. The worries of yesterday All fade when this one shows you the way The touch of fate That claims mens souls Renders then them helpless, they have no control The one of darkness who serves the light Comes forth to take us away Steals what is not his to take, the joy of loved ones from our day He feels no remorse For the ones he takes Nor does he have any compassion for those at stake Bringing from this life to the next To your judgment To your final test It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ooohh this was very interesting....I'm gonna re-read it a few more times...hmm...I liked it a lot, a very lot. ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I have not read much of your work but this poem really got to me for some reason. I really enjoyed it and I am going to put it in my library. Keep up the great work, I am now really looking forward to reading more of it. Until your next masterpiece -- Linc |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... you give Death such a bad image here.  Nicely done.~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
death deserves a bad image  thats just me. this was amazing. definite library piece Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was an interesting read. I thought you did ok. I didn't like it that much for some reason. It didn't click with me. You wrote it fine, but my personal opinion says no....oh well....to each his own eh?  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a very well written piece. I enjoyed it.. Nicely done  --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
hey all. thanks for replying. it means a lot to me to know that that ya like the stuff i write. and Allan would you rather i gave death a better image? hmmm i may just do that. well thanks all and later It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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