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Hate or love? You decide.
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
Hate or love? You decide. It creeps up on me enveloping me controlling me Motivating me it fills my heart It can destroy me But i cant Get rid of it It has become all that i am Death is but an escape from loneliness |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is very creative! I think the thought could be expanded even further, into a more elongated poem. Although I know that's not your style.  Still, outstanding work! I'm undecided...   ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Empty tears- Often there is a fine line between love and hate...you've done a great job with this...it's a thinker, and I like that.  Keep writing... smiles, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. this is tough. It really made me think. I like poems that do that.. I don't know which it is, but I do know that this is a very good poem. Nice job, Empty. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
great poem. great idea. just great. i liked the way you kept it short n sweet, i kind of think it would have lost something if it was longer. great post. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hey great poem..i liked how we could decide uopn the different polarities.. ..it give new meaning to the word "experience" if you get where im coming from.. ..good stuff!"Life is not long and boring, |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
Jee Wiz, what to say about this one.. Well first off, well written, and i do def. agree with alan, it could be expanded, but for what it was , it was great. It also made me think, which is good.. I hope its LOVE not HATE, for me it would be LOVE..That was my DECISION..LOL.. Tell me yours if you want to..i would like to know.. Keep Writing.. Jeff |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is great! i love it. i like how it's short. the length is perfect. ~kate |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this was a great poem with a great idea behind it. i certainly hope that it's love, it's too bad hate is so much easier to find... Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job on this one. I guess it could ver well be both. They are both VERY powerful.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Silver Butterfly Junior Member
since 2001-03-13
Posts 42Between here and the end |
Hate or love... hmm... I could see it either way. But this poem could be used for almost anything, because almost anything can consume your being and control who you are. I won't get too in depth here. I can't really find anything wrong with this poem, but I like some of your others better. I really like that you used 'motivating' it seems that many people think of motovation as always a good thing, but it's not necessarily. Okay... well don't I feel deep..... sort of.. Ciao |
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