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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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hey everyone, comment ca va? I know I havent been replying( hangs head and shuffles feet) but im gonna start again. you dont have to reply if u dont want. its not even close to good. ......title?....... My body is sitting at the chair eyes staring at the screen fingers tapping away at the keys My soul is lost, never to be found misplaced forever in a world of blackness, devouring me whole No light, no shadows just the pit of darkeness narled branches dig into my flesh my feelings roaming above my head My arms give way, legs crumble to the ground, hands clawing against the sticky earth horrible smells fill the air the feeling of death and pain crush my senses I can taste the sour air burning on my tongue I feel your bitter lips upon my ear Your calloused hands ripple on my arms, painful words blister the sky The water laughs at me trees cut at my soul your crude words tear at my heart for all i am is a lost and stupid girl Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I'm gald to see you posting again and i didn't think it sucked at all. you conveyed your feelings very well in this poem, great job and keep posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"My arms give way, legs crumble to the ground, hands clawing against the sticky earth" This poem is very well written, Ina. You expressed yourself so well... This poem was truly a pleasure to read, and I'm happy to see a new post from you. Keep posting. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
nicely done regi. I liked it a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great job, very powerful. You creative phrasings like "blistering the sky" and "ripple on my arms" always make me jealous.  ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Parfait poème mon amie!! Je l'aime beaucoup.  Ok, i dunno if that was all correct, but anyways.. This was really good, Ina. I'm sorry you're feeling this way though. Hope everything turns around for you.. ~Sarah *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
silver are you on some medication???? anyways didn't get a thing that gurl said well...it didn't sucked actually it was nicely done soo keep writing |
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