»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #4
»
Rose Petals
| Teen Poetry #4 |
|
Rose Petals |
|
|
banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The rose, like all life, finds destiny wrapped around wilting decay. No beauty can deny the passage of time. Shapely petals cling to stalks, as tears cling to your chin before they fall. Those silky tears drift away like a whisper, and gather at the feet of the thorns. They collect bellow like satin pools of blood. Death steals away ruby teardrops, until a single petal remains. Beauty left as a hint of a dream. What life life remains for that petal, when all it knows is what has gone before? A teardrop left in lonely yearning, to join the blood beneath the thorns. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. [This message has been edited by banburycross (edited 04-06-2001).] |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Peter - All Rights Reserved | |||
Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is a great poem I really liked it. Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
||
|
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was so awesome. I really really liked it. You did so well on this one. Kudos!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
||
|
silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
This is really, really good! Wow. REALLY good! I love the descriptions and...and..i just love it.  Great job, keep posting! *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
||
|
AsBurYAnGel Junior Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 14Virginia |
This was great. I really loved.It was the first poem of yours I ever read. I wish i had the talent to write as well as you. keep posting,Pweezz! |
||
|
Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I agree with AsBury, I wish I had that talent too!  This poem is beautiful.. another job very well done. I love the structure and the flow especially. Thanks for sharing this, and keep posting. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
||
|
Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
OOhh!!! Oh me liked this very, very much. YEAH! GRRRRRRREAT job, keep lettin us read.  ~Carly NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live. |
||
|
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice job well written keep writin |
||
|
Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oustanding work. The form of it was excellent, all in single lines or couplets. The imagery was so powerful... you have a real talent for imagery. I can't believe I missed this one! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
||
LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is amazingly beautiful!! Gosh, the imagery really pounds into your mind. This one will not be easily forgotten. Beautiful! Thanks for sharing!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
||
|
lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow i really like this poem..like alot!! awsome description and its written great!!! <3 kim " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
||
|
Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
what can i say that hasn't allready be said? really great post. keep it up everything is skin deep |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
