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4 Days After 9
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4 Days After 9 |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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4 Days After 9: I stay down and you come up. This bouncing ball sherade. Living life as life is lived. Our simple masquerade. We're your all that you deny, The truth of fantasy. Killing off your shadow hell While enhancing our dreams. I walk off as you run in. Both trip with time. Ending up with a bruised knee At four days after nine.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice one DD! I likes very very much! four days after nine... nice way of putting it. -Allan [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
it was really good. nice imagery. Regina |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice... nice... I liked it a lot bro. Such a unique style you always use to express your ideas... great job. ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Dopey another good poem. You always write the most interesting poetry. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well thanks all for the replies, I appreciate them. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"Living life as life is lived. Our simple masquerade." I really like the way this whole poem is written, you've done very well with it Dopey. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Why do you have to write with sunh depth?  everytime i read a poem of yours, my brain freezes --- lol j/k great poem Dopes something simpler next time though  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
nice post dopey...i gotta say it takes me a while to read into the words, but very nicely put.... i loved these two lines:" Living life as life is lived. Our simple masquerade." there is so much meaning in just those lines! Salma |
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