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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
note 1: part of the "hardest breakup" sessions. note 2: i didnt break up. never have. note 3: ill be taking a vacation, maybe ill be back eventually. note 4: this one will not be explained ever on the board. i think its pretty straight forward. forethought: First your heart, then the universe. -San's plan for universal domination. -=Seed=- i always have flowers here, i pick them myself. i come here quite often, nobody seems to mind. i come to see Amanda, my darling sweet heart. we had such pleasant times. we "bloomed" together some say. i wonder why shes taking so long. more than our first date. she wore a blue dress that day. i bought her magnolias at night. "everything comes to those who wait" i heard her say, in the rose garden one day. nobody smiles here. they dress like the lotus. its been weeks, since they planted Amanda. I like this place, like a big garden for amanda and me. i always have flowers here, i pick them myself. -San San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, San... good poem, man. I really liked this one-- it's good to know that it's not authentic or anything. I often do the same, writing about experiences that I've never had. It's great for your writing AND your empathic skills, isn't it? I really think i would like this session, i don't believe I've seen anything else from it. Have a nice vacation. -Allan |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
WOW!!!! What a powerful poem you have here!! I loved it dearly. My fav part was "i come to see Amanda, my darling sweet heart. we had such pleasant times. we "bloomed" together some say." Wonderfully done San I just love how you.... whats the word.... oh well sorry i can not think of what i am trying to say still in awe by the poem.Keep up the work ~Amanda~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yes, yes, yes...once again, insanity proves to be wonderful....Sweet but oh so sad...I'm gonna miss ya... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
WOw, nice one here felipe. Me gusto mucho loco.........que sigues asi.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Im in awe over the whole flower/Amanda thingy.. great volume in your heartest breakup sessions... ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
thanx fer the scarce replies. i decided not to take vacations. i started thinking on it yesterday, and after much pleading from Carly (and annoying comments by Dope in school, mostly during class, while drinking expired gatorade) i cant just leave the board. not for now anyways, i kinda have a mission and chivalry prohibits me from doing that. the Shining Armor sessions soon. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
So now you're not going on "vacation", cool  Excellent job on this one, it is straight forward but still very meaningful. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
good to hear your staying and i def. liked this post! very nice Salma |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Whoa... forgive me for having taken that "vacation" thing literally... I thought you were going to Hawaii or something. ^_^ Well, I just feel like an idiot now! Sorry for prompting that you "have a nice vacation," I honestly didn't mean to imply that you should leave. Stick around, San. I like reading your sessions. -Allan "Allan, don't ever be afraid to disappoint me" -Amanda (the most meaningful thing that has ever been said to me) |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very well done don't even mind Carly, that's how she is  This vacation thing has got me all confused  Great post San keep them coming I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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