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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
Standing in the rain, I here the thunder call me Raindrops hitting my face, I close my eyes As a lightning strikes just behind me. I’m screaming out your name, cause I need you so Can’t reason with the time, the time that’s standing still For as long as I’ve longed to be hold. I need some help, a little room inside my heart Cause your love is beyond my reach, every night is so dark So lonely without your warm, wish everything was just like before. But no matter what, you’re beyond me. Trying to express, the way I feel in words So you’ll understand, the way I am right here Please let me release all your hurts. As true as the stars, the truly shine from above There’s no lie to this, I want you to know right from the start that you are all I am ever thinking of. I need some love, the word that sets me free I’m ready for whatever’s you answer, to lost can’t breathe So hopeful I can’t think straight, wish the question weren’t to late. But no matter what, you’re beyond me. Even if the world changed, change wouldn’t be enough Not even if I chose the open road, I wouldn’t find the way to your love your beautiful face is all I can remember, it stopped all my senses cause this stops the way I feel. I need some happiness, some caring words from your eyes Sitting under the bridge singing, singing songs of love deep inside The green grass on the other side, keeps putting your picture in my mind. But no matter what, you’re beyond me. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Didn't i read a poem similar to this? Uh......well anyway, I liked this one a lot! It really connected with me.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
DUDE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS kicked some SERIOUS butt. Yep. Sure did. ~Carly Many miles behind my eyelashes, there always seems to be |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is great thanx for sharing. Andrew. " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
I agree with Carly! This one RULES! But realy it's sad! Best of luck to you my friend. No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Outstanding expression of your feelings and emotions. Keep it up. can't wait to see more of your work "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
wow, that must have been quite a catharsis to write. really great poem. lots of emotion. everything is skin deep |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is so well written. Very beautiful piece.. The way you expressed your emotions here was excellent. Wonderful job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This ia really great writing, the emotion is realy beautiful in this. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I loved your poem. It is going in the library. Some poems really click with me for some reason. I guess I just like a certain type, and this is one of them. *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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