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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne 
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Nobody knows how I feel how I want to hide, I lay awake each night trembling inside. My heart is calling you hoping for an answer, no reply is returned my eyes turn into a blur. My heart is like a jigsaw puzzle all torn apart, waiting to get put together please, open up your heart. Just being around you makes me die inside, wanting to be closer and more true your feeling, please confide. Tell me what's going on in the passages of your heart, Please only one word will start. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow! your work is very fresh. i thought this poem reminded me of feelings we have when were angry or sad. hope to see more! regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"Nobody knows how I feel how I want to hide, I lay awake each night trembling inside." This is a great piece of work. Those first 4 lines hit home.. The only suggestion I have is the last 2 lines could flow easier. Good job. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was very well written. You are a wonderful poet  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
all your poems r really great i love the way u write  |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You expressed yourself really well. Youo have penned such emotions great job thanks for the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Great poem, I know exactly how you feel from reading your poem. "It is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all" ~Unknown |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is a great poem, possibly the best poem by you i've read. this was very powerful writing, keep up the good work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne |
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