Teen Poetry #4 |
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beautiful day |
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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
Rain washes off the dirt from my face Silent flashes of light race their noisy brothers The wind sings me a song to calm me down All the trees perform a beautiful dance for me People run indoors for a reason unknown to me Why would they flee this beautiful day? "Cogito ergo sum"-I think, therefore I exist |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
short and to the point. great work! Regina |
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Allan Riverwood![]() ![]()
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Insightful. It's nice to go out and watch the trees dance. ![]() And great job on the title. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Storms can be frightning, or they can be beautiful. It all depends on your outlook. Thanks for giving us a glimpse into your point of view. ![]() "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like your outlook. I liked this. It was short, and well written. Nice job. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Maybe cuz there's too much sun and they are all allergic to it.....or maybe it's spring and they are allergic to Spring......or maybe they needed to go to the bathroom. Who knows!! Good poem! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
great write my friend i enjoyed every line on this one simple words but outstanding work thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Now i have the U2 song stuck in my head. anyway, this is very well written, you did an excellent job on this, definetely one of my favorites from you. keep up the good work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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