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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
Sometimes I feel as if I am not listened to At times I feel as if I am another CHALKLINE waiting to be traced around my body. When I think to myself I can see that line drawn You know its said "Ellos mueren cuando tu espirito muere" But I feel as though I've already lost my soul Once my close friend, like a brother said to me "El tiempo lo cura todo"... but that's not true when was the ligt supposed to shine on me, when was it supposed to shine on us Nobody would listen to what I had to say Nobody would listen to the truth All they did was say go home kid it was boud to happened to a kid of such youth They didn't even say an I am sorry young one That you had to see your friend gome home so soon He wasn't even 17 yet he left us cause of the choice he had made All they did was turn and walk away As if nothing had happened How long will society turn there backs on youth How many of us must die What will it take for you to take the blind folds off R.I.P. Ahmad mi amigo I'll see you soon 8/14/82_6/22/98 |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is such a sad piece. It's sad that nobody seems to be willing to listen to you after the death of your friend. I hope writing this helped some of the pain. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
deeps stuff, good message. Not much more to say about that now is there? >¶Øʆ< |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
TrueLuv: Such a sad piece. I can't imagine what it must feel like to have someone you care for so much to be taken from you. It is such a shame that society seems to be turning a blind eye to an incident like this. Don't give up. Make them listen to you. As LoveBug said, I hope writing this helped some of the pain. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentra |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, I like how you've written this poem, even though I don't understand the foreign stuff (spanish i'm assuming). Sorry to hear you have lost your friend. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
this poem is a incredible piece. ah who cares, ill say it in spanish! el poema fue increible. de verdad que me toco. fue uno de esos poemas que uno no se espera encontrarse, pero de momento te ves enfrente de ellos y no sabes que decir. lo siento por tu amigo y entiendo por lo que estas pasando. te digo que lo que hace falta para que se quiten las vendas de los ojos son mas gente como tu y con tu talento. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this poem....nice one. Oh and San is being evil again.....i'll translate: "the poem was incredible. To be honest, it touched me. It was one of those poems that you don't expect to find, but in a moment you stumble upon it and you just don't know what to say. I'm sorry about your friend and I understand what you're going through. im telling you that what we need for people to take the blindfolds off their eyes and see is more people like you and with your talent" Ok.....yea San is on a Puerto Rican trip, hey I do it sometimes hehe...... BYE! Javier the cocky tri-lengualed boy, over and out!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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