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AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

0 posted 2001-03-24 06:24 AM

I don't know if this makes any sense. But it sounded a reasonable explaination of a hearts true wonder...

It was then in that moment,
My face changed shape,
It was then in that moment,
My heart I no longer recognized.
How many floods will I swim?
Before I can find my tears?
How many mountains will I climb?
Before I can find my feet?

Words come effortlessly,
But lack these last few meetings,
Heart beats fly,
But slow these last few days.
I found my soul in your river,
I found my heart in your stream,
But I can no longer find myself,
In your eyes which I have known.

Mirroring eternity,
Forever comes by so fast,
At the dawn of a new day,
I can only see sunset.
Do you think of me?
When your head hits the pillow?
And do you think of me?
When you wake bathed in sweat?

Why I do not know,
Questions loom in front,
Answers threaten to storm,
If I give them the opportunity.
I heard my song played by your voice,
I read my words written by your hand,
But I could not feel my passion,
Through your hands which I did know.

Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

1 posted 2001-03-24 07:26 AM

Inflexive, as always my dear. Your word choice really helps abstraction…maybe we can talk this weekend? We really have been less than the whole “two ships passing in the harbor” shiznic…anywho…it’s 4am and I’m going to bed…

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-03-24 10:21 AM

Wow, this is really good! It's deep... I like that a lot. Good job!

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-03-24 01:33 PM

I think this said a lot. Your style is something to be proud of, you have a lot of well worded sentences in this poem. Not bad at all.
So two old members decided to rejoin us, did they?

Forgive me for being one of the new crowd. I hope you stick around, this time.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2001-03-24 05:12 PM

This is a beautiful piece. I love how it flows, and the content is just extrordinary. It's good to see the older guys come back, we've been missing your poetry!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

5 posted 2001-03-24 06:40 PM

Thanks guys, as always your uplifting response is duely noted.

Allan - hi, it's nice to meet you. A new face in the crowd is always a nice to come back to.

Deranger - yes, the ships passing in the habour is a vast exageration, we're not even merely two rain drops falling in the same sky. As always, I missed you.

Thanks guys, it's nice to be back.

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

6 posted 2001-03-24 10:25 PM

hey, can anyone tell me what the grey folder means?? It's been a while since I've been here

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

7 posted 2001-03-25 01:44 PM

Very well done and powerful, Shell! Glad to see you back here.

The grey folder means that the author has replied to their own topic.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-03-25 06:31 PM

Great job on this one. i liked it!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

9 posted 2001-03-25 08:06 PM

Hey wow this is great! Yea it makes sense. This might just be go in my library..hmmm....

Good job

Bel

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

10 posted 2001-03-25 11:07 PM

wonderful

i loved this..to the library

oh and i liked your critiques quote

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

11 posted 2001-03-31 04:03 PM

You have a way with words
I'm astonished with this poem
It's such a great piece
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

12 posted 2001-04-01 01:51 AM

Thanks Acire, to be honest I can't believe I'm getting such positive feed back from this one.
But I really do appreciate it.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

13 posted 2001-04-04 06:15 PM

We are our own worst critic...So, take our word for it, it defenitely is a great write

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

14 posted 2001-04-04 06:31 PM

Hey,

Great poem keep it up and I agree with arcire. Until we meet again...

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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