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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-03-20 11:59 AM

I see you, I wanna touch you
but you're just another vision in a dream.
And when ever it starts to rain
I wanna call you,
but I don't know your name.
Now it feels like the bridge from my heart to you
has been destroyd.

I feel you, I wanna know you
but there's no way to hold your hand.
And you are like a rainbow
because without you,
there is no tomorrow.
Now it feels like a storm broke my heart in two
forever more

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-03-20 12:56 PM

Aww.. this is sad. But very good job. Short and sweet... I liked this.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-20 02:18 PM

This is a very sad poem. It touched me....I hope everything gets better for you!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

3 posted 2001-03-20 02:48 PM

Wonderful poem...little sad...but reatly written, keep it up.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2001-03-20 03:36 PM

This is a sad piece, but it's very well-written and you describe the sadness beautifully. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-03-20 10:32 PM

Good job, just a bit sad though. Kinda got to me.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-03-28 05:24 PM

very well expressed emotions. Not as good as your others though IMHO. Thanks for the reed and keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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