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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2001-03-18 07:39 PM

I think I'm on the verge
Of letting it all out tonight
Sitting up here drowning in my shattered dreams
And tears misting over my eyes

My heart feels burdened
By unpredictability and loves casualities
I just want to talk
To write it all out in a letter

Perhaps then I would feel so much better
Just to break down all these barriers
That are facing me, I want to be one step closer to my destiny

So I think tonight
I feel the haunting sound of my heart
Calling out to me
Perhaps soon it will let me be...

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

1 posted 2001-03-18 09:19 PM

O0oOo0o...great poem..i reall liked "..tears misting over my eyes.." great job. straight to the library

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

keoni
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since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-03-19 10:30 AM

Yeah, I agree. It's going into the library right now!
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-03-19 12:29 PM

I liked this very much. Great job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

4 posted 2001-03-19 01:56 PM

Impressive writing. The images in this poem, as well as the sounds, are quite impressive and powerful. Keep up the good work.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

WaitN4AnAngel
Junior Member

since 2001-03-08

Posts 37
I wish I knew where I was...

5 posted 2001-03-19 02:55 PM

I love your choice of words. It leaves a very clear image. I can relate to this poem even though I do not know why you feel that way. Keep posting!!

WaitN4AnAngel
Junior Member

since 2001-03-08

Posts 37
I wish I knew where I was...

6 posted 2001-03-19 02:55 PM

I love your choice of words. It leaves a very clear image. I can relate to this poem even though I do not know why you feel that way. Keep posting!!

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

7 posted 2001-03-19 05:23 PM

This is a great poem, I especially like the line " I feel the haunting sound of my heart" anyway thanks for sharing, Keep up the good work.
Zu.

Love is a friendship caught on fire.

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

8 posted 2001-03-19 07:51 PM

Good work.
Keep it up.
-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-03-20 01:12 PM

This is an excellent poem! Great work!

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

10 posted 2001-03-20 02:47 PM

I love it, there's not really much left to say but it's so sweet and strong at the same time. love it

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

11 posted 2001-03-20 02:53 PM

i love this! i think a lot of people can relate, thanks for posting.

Valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

12 posted 2001-03-20 03:40 PM

"So I think tonight
I feel the haunting sound of my heart
Calling out to me
Perhaps soon it will let me be..."

Wow! This is a beautiful piece. It's been awhile since I've seen you, and you have only improved! I really loved this. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

13 posted 2001-03-20 10:34 PM

Ooh sweet... very VERY powerful.
I enjoyed it a great deal.

Can't wait to finish our little project.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

14 posted 2001-03-20 10:38 PM

I came, I saw, I read, I cried, I LIKED!

you always choose the best words to paint the perfect picture!

~*~Jesilyn~*~

"Tell me why you cry"

aLLaLONE
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since 2000-09-25

Posts 7

15 posted 2001-03-21 12:40 PM

great poem... it really hits home for me... thank you...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

16 posted 2001-03-28 06:18 PM

"Perhaps then I would feel so much better
Just to break down all these barriers
That are facing me, I want to be one step closer to my destiny"

What more can I say.....

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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