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A Ball of Yarn
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A Ball of Yarn |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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This morning, my cat unraveled a ball of yarn As I picked it up, I realized I am like that ball of yarn You have to unravel me to find the good From the outside I appear to be heartless But that’s only because no one’s ever unraveled me From the secrets my heart holds My journal is the only thing I turn to That won’t laugh at my mistakes You gotta take my string And unravel me from my secrets I’m a ball of yarn But one ones unraveled me My heart is where the ball begins Then it wraps around Until it’s visible to the outside I’m not asking for much . . . Just for someone to unravel me. i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Awww Tamma that's so sweet! It's a great metaphore, it makes me want to write another poem!! lol I won't post it here though, and it won't be plagurism (sp??)! well anyway, thanks for the inspiration, and more so the read. -Stay with us "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
OHhhhhhhhHHHhhh Tamma. This kicked some serious bootay. Yeah. Man did I like this. Man oh man. Wahoo! Well good luck in finding that sumone.. ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
I couldnt belive that no one had responded to this poem when I read it earlier!! I couldnt reply at the time b/c I was in a rush. Great job! I love your use of analogies. Very interesting. Keep posting! *Me* *If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything* *A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things* |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Tamma, very cool poem. Awesome metaphor. This one really kicked butt! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Cool, very cool. Sometimes the best parts of ourselves are hard to reveal, we don't want to be uncovered or vulnerable... I believe you will one day find that person, and he will make it so easy to show every piece of you. Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
VERY creative metaphor! I like this one... It's one of the best I've read from you. Very good job! --Marie |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A ball of yarn eh? haha.... I thought this was quite good. Very good thinking tamma!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I like it a lot Tamma I too like the ball of yarn idea I see one's growth in poetry keep sharing  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Loved the format and poem. Keep it up -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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