Teen Poetry #4 |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
When everything gets to be too much, and nothing's left unsaid... When this world leaves you with a broken heart, and it feels as though not a thing can mend... When your life seems bleak, and all you can do is sob... When your everyday chores are too rough, and it hurts to move about... When all that was now is not, and even memories are faded... When you want so badly to be free, from all the ties that bind... Look around you and see, a ray of light shines through... Forever darkness is impossible, be patient and your luck will turn around. "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
be patient and your luck will turn around. lot of wisdom here!!! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good job, Jenn! It's important for people to be patient, at ALL times. See you around. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Yes the message is very good :-) and the delivery is also good! Well written poem, thank you for posting it! :-) "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked it. I thought it was written quite nicely. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a very positive poem, something along which i could write but never seem to be able to. Excellent job gurl..keep up the great work! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Allan, are you nuts? Patient all the time? You're crazy man, completely crazy!! Now Jenn, considering you are the poet, I'll address you now. Your poem is so sad and I mean really sad. The outcome brought a smile to the face which is good. Your third stanza spoke alot of truth to me. Thankyou for such a great read. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Love the ending you did an marvelous job keep em coming jenn thanks for the read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Great job on this. It's a beautiful piece. Keep posting... --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
great poem as always *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
""" a ray of light shines through... Forever darkness is impossible """ Wonderful, Jenn. Well said Jason |
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