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Young Child |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
A young child born to run wild Never thinking twice about the consequence of life If you drink your life away your sure to pay If you smoke your life away your bound to remain in your own reality If you continue to play all day life will catch up to you and lay you where you stay A young child of the ghetto is born to suffer and murder These words are written in blood by my hands God has seen this and turned away So why do we Why are we not there to help I'll tell you why "fear" A young child is born only to get free from such misery Only the strong will make it and not the ones with the most cash The ones with most cash will only continue to make there cash off the ghetto children and in the end will lay where they once stood A young child is born and will die because of the choice he/she had made A young child is born |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh this is good! I liked the repetition in the beginning and end. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Same here. This was a marvelous piece. It's good to see more regular posts by you. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is an absolutely excellent piece! Thank you for the great read... I can't wait to read more from you. --Marie |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was not as good as the others I have read recently. I didn't like this one. I also disagreed with the fact that all rich people live off of the chlidren of the ghetto.....some people actually work hard for a living....so yea But anyway.....hope to see more  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This was interesting... I liked the concept. I think it may have been a little weak towards the end, but nonetheless good. Keep it up! Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very interesting poem Trueluv You have expressed your beliefs clearly thanks for the share "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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