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HappyPretender
Junior Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 38
Prince George, VA

0 posted 2001-03-13 09:35 AM

No one knows
Of the pain I feel
Or how I feel
All alone

I can't explain it
Can't make you understand
You wouldn't know
You won't have a clue

I won't give you a chance
To prove you're here
For if you fail
I can't let you near

It hurts so much
No hearts can I trust
I want to run
Hide from pain
But I know
It will find me.

<3~*Rachael*~<3
*we can't become what we need to be by remaining what we are*

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-03-13 09:41 AM

Ooh... I like this. Personification of "pain" is always fun.

Nice.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

2 posted 2001-03-13 02:51 PM

Simple, yet oh so effective. I really know whatcha mean here. Nice work.
~Carly

"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake."
- Leonardo da Vinci

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-03-13 07:09 PM

Well if pain will follow you then you just gotta juke him out and run fast about a mile east, then hide behind the first tree you find.

Anyhow, nice poem. I really thought you did well on this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-03-17 04:24 PM

very well expressed emotions
i do hope things turn around for you
Like Carly said, "simple yet so effective"

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 03-17-2001).]

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-03-17 04:34 PM

This is a very expressive one! I like this a lot. Very well done.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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