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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
*Sorry about the types of poems I have been writing lately. * And there she lies in the Dungeon of Pain. The Darkness Envelopes her and makes her warm, Her heart beats to the sound of the Dripping Red Liquid above her head, as it Crashes against the stone floor. Her arms are Chained to the wall and is unable to leave her Domain. Her body Throbs .....as it begins to Decay before her. Her Soul of Glass is Shattered and begins to Cut herself as she moves about for Freedom. Her heart beats more rapidly and the Liquid of Red builds up to her mouth. She begins to Suffocate.. Gasping for Air she raises her head!!!! Her hair, Blackened to the core, covers her face and Entangles around her neck. She Screams a Roar of Silence for no one hears her pain.... ...she Suffers alone in her Domain. The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
OMG, this poem kicks butt! But I hope you're ok! And just rise above all the crap swirling below you, and spit into the center of the vortex, laughing at allt he people who think they're winning, by shoveling all the crap towards you. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
lol I just have to laugh at your little pep-talk there. Thanks for the reply, the words of wisdom, and little laugh. ~ Amanda Destiny~ The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is good and I do hope your okay well I have to go so until your next poem cya -- Linc "The goal is not allways the the reason something is done the path to get to the goal is more important." |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Hey don't apologize for your poems...any form of expression is a good one  Anyways, yeah I loved this...I wish I could write poems as metaphoric, symbolic, and with as much imagery as this...kudos to you! Hope to see tons more from you. ~K~ ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
this was really sad but I have felt the same way before more than once. Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Amazing poem. To be quite honest, the third-person used in it reminded me of the work of anonymousfemale. I hope you get better, Amanda. I'll always be willing to talk. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Elven......wow......yea......to summarize his peptalk....forget the crap....give the crap to others......don't take crap.....crap is bad...... OK.......well I thought you did wonderfully on this poem. Quite dark.....I think the imagery was pretty good too! I could so envision what was going on. Nice job.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Wonderful such images your poem shows it open up the minds creativity well done Amanda "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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