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We, Us |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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We, Us there is never an I or he nor is there a you or she but there is a definite we therein lies the mystery love binds our care together we look neither right nor left but we feel the heave and heft and the us that lies within keeps us from looking again and again love binds us together the us of we is marvelous so much sharing, little fuss the miles of smiles, the good cheer knowing what we say, we hear… love winds us together if I were to take a step you would take one too if I were to skitter in joy you'd be skittering, too love is kind, together if I were to softly cry you would only hold me closer if you were to softly sigh I'd be your angel on your shoulder love is ours, together the we of us is circumspect for our footfalls we expect to hear one of the other even if we only live in realm of mystery we bind our us together 01.25.01 |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Suni, how beautiful is this? Very beautiful indeed! I especially loved the we of us is circumspect for our footfalls we expect to hear one of the other even if we only live in realm of mystery Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Replacing the "I love you's" with " I love Us" ..... wonderful write and as it should be in the manner of true love. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtakingly beautiful, Karilea! Just as love should be!! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Sighing here at the truth and beauty in this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
A LOVEly piece, Sunshine. "We,Us" doesn't seem to be an adequate title, but then this language doesn't have a proper word for what you have written about. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This almost sounds like a new wedding ceremony. Awesome. I agree the title needs to be bigger, to reflect the magnitude of the poem. Love it. Sandra |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
A lovely poem Sunshine. Cheers Jon |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Let me add my praise to the 7 before me - you must already know what an exceptional poem you've written - that of a woman who knows love and knows she is truly loved. and I agree - these words should be part of wedding vows |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is so lovely...words straight from the heart of love We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, this is outstanding love it really is. Sheer poetry, of course it is you wrote it, so it would be. and on the understanding of less is more, I say I love this Take care love Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all...how much I appreciate your looking into this and seeing, of all things....wedding vows.... I guess now I shall have something to offer someone if they should ever say "can you write something for us...?" and I will say "I think I have it...now...." Kethry, I thank you for your honesty... Mark...your poetry is so beautiful, I someday hope to match it, at least once... denise....yes!.... Marge, I heard that sigh.... Krawdad, I know...but what can I do...I go with the moment.... Cat....if you can give me a better title, I will use it.... Thank you Jon....I don't know that I've come across your name before, so, a belated WELCOME to Passions....please, enjoy!.... Mr. Yeats....I would hold most poets here up before me....so that I might strive a little longer, and become stronger, but your words, Sir, are heeded, and heeded well, thank you.... Paula, knowing what you do for those who cannot, it is I who thank you.... Marsha....I shall continue to try, just to please you.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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