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- Entangled Butterfly - Double Tanka |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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 Double Tanka  Cries of delirium echo from empress of sky devoured by pain kaleidoscope colours drain bleeding upon devil's lair ~ Fangs rupture dreams butterfly raped with venom wings rip from the seams dark death shall liberate entangled in spider web *By Melissa Honeybee* The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
terribly sad......very vivid too!  -SEA |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
read many poems dedicated to the beauty of butterflies...pleasantly surprised that you show us another side of the world of butterflies |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
MH* I loved this....I know it's not meant to be beautiful but you know what....I do find the beauty in it...an irony...kind of the "greener grass" thought I guess....great weaving Melissa...you have a pen that weaves gold with style and grace~ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Melissa I like this muchly. Wonderful tanka. Poeminister |
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Mr.Magoo Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 104 |
I have no idea what a tanka is???? I do wish it had been a moth instead of a butterfly..Just Kiddin Very nice "tanka"? I`ll have to look that up. Mr.Magoo |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Melissa, this is so painful and vivid. Well done! |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
eeeek well done vivid imagery...made me glad I am not a butterfly...although i have felt like one. You did a superb job with this piece Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
painfully clear perhaps this says even more beauty does not guarantee roses and smiles |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think I just heard a butterfly scream...everything OK Melybee? |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful but sad tanka....excellent my friend....enjoyed it. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew...this one stings with pain, but so well written |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you for your replies and encouragement! Yes, Karilea, I am okay  Although I did need to write this tanka to pour my emotions out, and now I feel fine. Also, everyone was writing about the perfect life of a butterfly and how beautiful they are, but, I wanted to be different, to show that even with beauty, tragic things can still occur, that we can lose our "butterfly" in an instant. Also, I think if you write about the most marvelous beauty dying in such an unfair fashion, it hits the reader more deeper. Take care, Melissa< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 01-24-2001).] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Melissa~ What deep thoughts in these Tanka's, great read and so wonderfully penned ~HUG~ Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 01-24-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you Tracie, glad you enjoyed this tanka~ Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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